I revised the critical essay and the final version for assessment is attached.
[the original is in this post]
My key revisions were
(a) adding a reference to Berger & Sontag (1983) To tell a story to elucidate one underpinning concept of the relational dynamic between author-subject/object-viewer
(b) to write through the previously bullet-pointed section that outlines the key changes of the above in the context of the networked image.
(c) to add a further closing sentence to draw back to the role of performativity and the shifting construction of boundaries between public and private in the context of the networked digital image.
I have highlighted the changed sections in a dark red in this new document, here.